scene from the bathroom
in my cabin
rain on the roof
drops on the river
concentric circles
outside my window
my houseboat
rain on the roof
sitting in the bathroom
clawfoot tub
river, raindrops
on the phone
my face in the mirror
old beveled mirror
above old pedestal sink
perched on the toilet
on the phone
my face in the mirror
breaking it off
saying no, no
no, listen
no
my face in the mirror
on the phone
looking
noticing
recognizing
between no and no
my eyes
my skin
my hair
on the phone
in the mirror
i am beautiful
on the phone
stronger, saying no
recognition
i am worth more
i deserve better
no, no
i am beautiful
tonight
rain on the roof
reflected in the mirror
lines around my eyes
grey streaks
bad skin
rain on the roof
in my bathroom
rain on the roof
where babies sleep
i am reminded
of a moment of strength
rain on the roof
and my face
reflected in the mirror
i am beautiful.
8.22.2010
rain on the roof
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You make me cry.
ReplyDeleteDamn you and your beautiful words.
This is why I hate poetry.
My brain rushes in to fill the spaces it sees need filling, and I am all out of breath and stunned at the result.
Jesus.
as always, LOVE IT!
ReplyDeleteaw, shucks.
ReplyDeletebreathless stupification is what i'm going for.
love.
Oh!
ReplyDeleteOh, wow.
I'm amazed. Thank you.
I think you should marry me.
ReplyDeleteI appreciate the love as well as the proposals.
ReplyDeleteI love this. I love especially the lines, "on the phone / stronger, saying no". I identify so much with a lot of what you are writing about : ) Thank you so very much for sharing this, I can't wait to include it in this week's linkup. xoxoxo
ReplyDeletethank you, Ms. Mara. i knew you would get it.
ReplyDeletexo to you!
Absolutely lovely, Marian.
ReplyDeleteaw! thanks, Nichole. a powerful moment/image that i appreciate being able to bring to the surface when necessary.
ReplyDeleteThis was so lovely to come across ....just resonating for me
ReplyDeleteAmyLynn
like raindrops on the roof? perfect.
ReplyDeleteGAH! I am so sorry! I MEANT to include this post. Thank you so much for linking it in the comments and I pinkyswear that next week it will appear at the very top of the list. Please forgive me?
ReplyDeleteah, no worries, my dear.
ReplyDeletei am nothing if not a self-promoter.
and you have quite a bit going on this week!
thinking of you.
and one last time...
ReplyDelete"on the phone
my face in the mirror
breaking it off
saying no, no
no, listen
no"
hmmmmm
I feel like I never said no, but always heard no
(still dont know Im beautiful?)
Nicole, you are beautiful.
ReplyDeleteRemind yourself.
I'm very please to have this memory to return to when I need to be reminded.
You are beautiful... but obviously you know that.
ReplyDeleteso obvious? hmmmm.
ReplyDelete:) lovelyyyyy
ReplyDeleteLovely. Rain on the roof, eyes in the mirror, No, I am worth more, I am beautiful. Indeed you are. Fantastic poem!
ReplyDeleteMarian~ I actually felt my heart race to stay up with the poem's pace. Great job! And the message is pretty important, too!
ReplyDeletehttp://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/05/12/reflecting-back/
I had to read this a second time.
ReplyDeleteIt's so sad and moving. You are beautiful, don't let anyone tell you any different.
Lovely write, Marian.
aw thank you my beautiful friends :)
ReplyDeleteif anyone's interested, this is part of a longer story.
click on "destined: a story in poems" just under the tag cloud to the right.
I think I caught the drift of the story. Excellent, brilliant. Enjoyed this.
ReplyDeletelove it! hope everyone knows they are beautiful. so relatable and well -written.
ReplyDeletehearts to you. thank you.
ReplyDeleteThis piece is simply amazing - I love it for so many reasons - the setting so sparingly described, the emotions barely controlled, and the refrain: I am beautiful... and I'm damn well worth more than this.
ReplyDeleteMy favourite of yours thus far.
aw! you are nice, thank you, kerry.
ReplyDeleteI like the inner reflection within the painted scene; You are beautiful and so are your words~
ReplyDeleteLovely stuff!
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
Until i read the last line I wanted to to shout "tin roof rusted" from the B52s Love Shack song.
ReplyDeleteseriously,
I really like how you showed inner strength and beauty waaaay before the last line.
I liked it.
thanks, Lance. and i approve of hollering
ReplyDeleteTIN ROOF, RUSTED! :)
I AB-SO-LUTE-LY love this! Wow!
ReplyDeletea brave moment well described
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