8.22.2010

rain on the roof

scene from the bathroom
in my cabin
rain on the roof
drops on the river
concentric circles
outside my window
my houseboat

rain on the roof 
sitting in the bathroom
clawfoot tub
river, raindrops
on the phone
my face in the mirror
old beveled mirror
above old pedestal sink
perched on the toilet
on the phone
my face in the mirror
breaking it off
saying no, no
no, listen
no

my face in the mirror
on the phone
looking
noticing
recognizing
between no and no
my eyes
my skin
my hair
on the phone
in the mirror
i am beautiful

on the phone
stronger, saying no
recognition
i am worth more
i deserve better
no, no
i am beautiful

tonight
rain on the roof
reflected in the mirror
lines around my eyes
grey streaks
bad skin 

rain on the roof
in my bathroom
rain on the roof
where babies sleep
i am reminded
of a moment of strength
rain on the roof
and my face
reflected in the mirror

i am beautiful.

34 comments:

  1. You make me cry.

    Damn you and your beautiful words.

    This is why I hate poetry.

    My brain rushes in to fill the spaces it sees need filling, and I am all out of breath and stunned at the result.

    Jesus.

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  2. aw, shucks.

    breathless stupification is what i'm going for.

    love.

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  3. Oh!

    Oh, wow.

    I'm amazed. Thank you.

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  4. I think you should marry me.

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  5. I appreciate the love as well as the proposals.

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  6. I love this. I love especially the lines, "on the phone / stronger, saying no". I identify so much with a lot of what you are writing about : ) Thank you so very much for sharing this, I can't wait to include it in this week's linkup. xoxoxo

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  7. thank you, Ms. Mara. i knew you would get it.
    xo to you!

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  8. aw! thanks, Nichole. a powerful moment/image that i appreciate being able to bring to the surface when necessary.

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  9. This was so lovely to come across ....just resonating for me


    AmyLynn

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  10. like raindrops on the roof? perfect.

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  11. GAH! I am so sorry! I MEANT to include this post. Thank you so much for linking it in the comments and I pinkyswear that next week it will appear at the very top of the list. Please forgive me?

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  12. ah, no worries, my dear.
    i am nothing if not a self-promoter.
    and you have quite a bit going on this week!
    thinking of you.

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  13. and one last time...
    "on the phone
    my face in the mirror
    breaking it off
    saying no, no
    no, listen
    no"
    hmmmmm
    I feel like I never said no, but always heard no
    (still dont know Im beautiful?)

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  14. Nicole, you are beautiful.
    Remind yourself.
    I'm very please to have this memory to return to when I need to be reminded.

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  15. You are beautiful... but obviously you know that.

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  16. Lovely. Rain on the roof, eyes in the mirror, No, I am worth more, I am beautiful. Indeed you are. Fantastic poem!

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  17. Marian~ I actually felt my heart race to stay up with the poem's pace. Great job! And the message is pretty important, too!
    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/05/12/reflecting-back/

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  18. I had to read this a second time.
    It's so sad and moving. You are beautiful, don't let anyone tell you any different.

    Lovely write, Marian.

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  19. aw thank you my beautiful friends :)
    if anyone's interested, this is part of a longer story.
    click on "destined: a story in poems" just under the tag cloud to the right.

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  20. I think I caught the drift of the story. Excellent, brilliant. Enjoyed this.

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  21. love it! hope everyone knows they are beautiful. so relatable and well -written.

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  22. This piece is simply amazing - I love it for so many reasons - the setting so sparingly described, the emotions barely controlled, and the refrain: I am beautiful... and I'm damn well worth more than this.

    My favourite of yours thus far.

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  23. aw! you are nice, thank you, kerry.

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  24. I like the inner reflection within the painted scene; You are beautiful and so are your words~

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  25. Until i read the last line I wanted to to shout "tin roof rusted" from the B52s Love Shack song.

    seriously,

    I really like how you showed inner strength and beauty waaaay before the last line.

    I liked it.

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  26. thanks, Lance. and i approve of hollering
    TIN ROOF, RUSTED! :)

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