8.22.2010

rain on the roof

scene from the bathroom
in my cabin
rain on the roof
drops on the river
concentric circles
outside my window
my houseboat

rain on the roof 
sitting in the bathroom
clawfoot tub
river, raindrops
on the phone
my face in the mirror
old beveled mirror
above old pedestal sink
perched on the toilet
on the phone
my face in the mirror
breaking it off
saying no, no
no, listen
no

my face in the mirror
on the phone
looking
noticing
recognizing
between no and no
my eyes
my skin
my hair
on the phone
in the mirror
i am beautiful

on the phone
stronger, saying no
recognition
i am worth more
i deserve better
no, no
i am beautiful

tonight
rain on the roof
reflected in the mirror
lines around my eyes
grey streaks
bad skin 

rain on the roof
in my bathroom
rain on the roof
where babies sleep
i am reminded
of a moment of strength
rain on the roof
and my face
reflected in the mirror

i am beautiful.
Posted by Marian at 10:17 PM
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34 comments:

  1. krisAugust 22, 2010 at 11:16 PM

    You make me cry.

    Damn you and your beautiful words.

    This is why I hate poetry.

    My brain rushes in to fill the spaces it sees need filling, and I am all out of breath and stunned at the result.

    Jesus.

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  2. LizzyAugust 22, 2010 at 11:26 PM

    as always, LOVE IT!

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  3. MarianAugust 22, 2010 at 11:28 PM

    aw, shucks.

    breathless stupification is what i'm going for.

    love.

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  4. AdrienneAugust 23, 2010 at 12:32 AM

    Oh!

    Oh, wow.

    I'm amazed. Thank you.

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  5. NigelAugust 23, 2010 at 4:22 AM

    I think you should marry me.

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  6. MarianAugust 23, 2010 at 2:50 PM

    I appreciate the love as well as the proposals.

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  7. marzipanAugust 23, 2010 at 9:19 PM

    I love this. I love especially the lines, "on the phone / stronger, saying no". I identify so much with a lot of what you are writing about : ) Thank you so very much for sharing this, I can't wait to include it in this week's linkup. xoxoxo

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  8. MarianAugust 23, 2010 at 9:48 PM

    thank you, Ms. Mara. i knew you would get it.
    xo to you!

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  9. NicholeAugust 24, 2010 at 10:07 AM

    Absolutely lovely, Marian.

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  10. MarianAugust 24, 2010 at 10:25 AM

    aw! thanks, Nichole. a powerful moment/image that i appreciate being able to bring to the surface when necessary.

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  11. AnonymousAugust 25, 2010 at 3:43 PM

    This was so lovely to come across ....just resonating for me


    AmyLynn

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  12. MarianAugust 25, 2010 at 9:59 PM

    like raindrops on the roof? perfect.

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  13. marzipanAugust 29, 2010 at 4:10 PM

    GAH! I am so sorry! I MEANT to include this post. Thank you so much for linking it in the comments and I pinkyswear that next week it will appear at the very top of the list. Please forgive me?

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  14. MarianAugust 29, 2010 at 4:48 PM

    ah, no worries, my dear.
    i am nothing if not a self-promoter.
    and you have quite a bit going on this week!
    thinking of you.

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  15. NicoleSeptember 27, 2010 at 10:25 PM

    and one last time...
    "on the phone
    my face in the mirror
    breaking it off
    saying no, no
    no, listen
    no"
    hmmmmm
    I feel like I never said no, but always heard no
    (still dont know Im beautiful?)

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  16. MarianSeptember 28, 2010 at 11:55 AM

    Nicole, you are beautiful.
    Remind yourself.
    I'm very please to have this memory to return to when I need to be reminded.

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  17. Eric 'Bubba' AlderJanuary 12, 2011 at 1:36 PM

    You are beautiful... but obviously you know that.

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  18. MarianJanuary 18, 2011 at 1:05 AM

    so obvious? hmmmm.

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  19. bttrflyscarMay 13, 2011 at 5:18 PM

    :) lovelyyyyy

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  20. Sherry Blue SkyMay 13, 2011 at 5:47 PM

    Lovely. Rain on the roof, eyes in the mirror, No, I am worth more, I am beautiful. Indeed you are. Fantastic poem!

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  21. Kim NelsonMay 13, 2011 at 5:56 PM

    Marian~ I actually felt my heart race to stay up with the poem's pace. Great job! And the message is pretty important, too!
    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/05/12/reflecting-back/

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  22. AndyMay 13, 2011 at 7:19 PM

    I had to read this a second time.
    It's so sad and moving. You are beautiful, don't let anyone tell you any different.

    Lovely write, Marian.

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  23. MarianMay 13, 2011 at 9:00 PM

    aw thank you my beautiful friends :)
    if anyone's interested, this is part of a longer story.
    click on "destined: a story in poems" just under the tag cloud to the right.

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  24. Henry ClemmonsMay 14, 2011 at 12:02 AM

    I think I caught the drift of the story. Excellent, brilliant. Enjoyed this.

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  25. IsabelMay 14, 2011 at 12:02 PM

    love it! hope everyone knows they are beautiful. so relatable and well -written.

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  26. MarianMay 14, 2011 at 1:18 PM

    hearts to you. thank you.

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  27. Kerry O'ConnorMay 14, 2011 at 1:33 PM

    This piece is simply amazing - I love it for so many reasons - the setting so sparingly described, the emotions barely controlled, and the refrain: I am beautiful... and I'm damn well worth more than this.

    My favourite of yours thus far.

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  28. MarianMay 14, 2011 at 5:03 PM

    aw! you are nice, thank you, kerry.

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  29. EllaMay 14, 2011 at 7:17 PM

    I like the inner reflection within the painted scene; You are beautiful and so are your words~

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  30. Anna :o]May 14, 2011 at 8:10 PM

    Lovely stuff!

    Anna :o]

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  31. LanceAugust 18, 2011 at 1:19 PM

    Until i read the last line I wanted to to shout "tin roof rusted" from the B52s Love Shack song.

    seriously,

    I really like how you showed inner strength and beauty waaaay before the last line.

    I liked it.

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  32. MarianAugust 18, 2011 at 9:38 PM

    thanks, Lance. and i approve of hollering
    TIN ROOF, RUSTED! :)

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  33. Sherry Blue SkyFebruary 20, 2013 at 1:40 PM

    I AB-SO-LUTE-LY love this! Wow!

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  34. lucychiliFebruary 22, 2013 at 6:57 AM

    a brave moment well described

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