6.18.2010

our room

Your room was small and neat
Still
The door was locked, but I wanted in

My room was stagnant and numb
What I signed up for
Stretched out before me

Our room is luscious and full
Verdant
A new forever, the door is open wide

24 comments:

  1. Lizzy Danger gave me the line "the door was locked, but I wanted in"

    Did I ever.

    http://lizzyswriting.blogspot.com/

    ReplyDelete
  2. forever love? merging of worlds? that's what this conjures for me. lovely marian. simply lovely!

    ReplyDelete
  3. "Verdant" is one of my favorite words on the planet.

    ReplyDelete
  4. "A new forever, the door is open wide"
    tasty and opulent...love this line
    its like bursting

    ReplyDelete
  5. tasty? opulent? write your own damn poetry, woman!
    xoxo

    ReplyDelete
  6. That's very nice!
    The merging of worlds and letting someone in.

    ReplyDelete
  7. The merging of personalities with the excitement of possibilities. Great thoughts.

    ~ cheryl

    ReplyDelete
  8. Ours is always so much better!

    Shalom.

    ReplyDelete
  9. This new room is a place I'd like to have some day. Lucky you! I enjoyed this.

    ReplyDelete
  10. yours, mine, ours. can't say that i don't sometimes pine for a room that is mine, but ours is way, way better.

    ReplyDelete
  11. Not neat and tidy,
    Not stagnant and numb,
    If it's now verdant,
    Someone has a green thumb,
    One door was locked,
    One wanted to be inside,
    When two worlds combine,
    Two hearts will reside.

    Your poem is great. Best wishes!

    ReplyDelete
  12. Love how the door is open when it's "ours"! :)

    ReplyDelete
  13. aw, dan roberson, that is so lovely and thank you.
    the door is busted open wide, for sure.

    ReplyDelete